1. You might have to reconsider Kia's tactics... Honestly, someone who is 5'3" probably won't try to punch somebody who is 6'3" in the face. Why not go for the kidneys?

2. If her back is against his front, he won't be able to punch her in the back. It's just not a good option at this point. A hand around the throat is a favorite, or perhaps grabbing her by her hair and yanking her head back.

3. I like it.


When writing fighting scenes, there are a few things to keep in mind. First is the point of view: don't skip from POV to POV because fight scenes are complicated enough. Second, don't focus only on what each fighter is doing; what happens as a result is just as important. For instance: when Albedo (btw is this intentional? Albedo) twists her arm, how does that make her arm feel? And don't just say it hurts. Third, action in fight scenes happens very quick, so you don't want the scene bogged down with lots of descriptors. Take the time to find verbs that show exactly what you mean without having to add a lot of adjectives. Fourth: you actually have a bit more time to describe everything than you might think, since people read faster than you write. Fifth, and finally: you don't have to describe everything; if a particular move is very common in movies, tv, the collective consciousness, etc, you don't have to do much more than allude to it if you want to keep moving.


Here's a brief example from something I wrote:

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“Aleda!” “It’s okay, Ryan, I’ve got this.” What in the bloody hell was that girl thinking!? He tried again to get a hold of her but the man was too quick, and by now he was closer. He grabbed Aleda by the arm, twisting the dagger out of her hand and pressing his own against her neck. “Last chance!” he grated. “Or I swear to God I’ll kill this little bitch!” Aleda struggled in his grasp, fighting the hand that was clamped around her arm. She would not give up. Ryan would have been impressed by her tenacity if he weren’t so terrified for her. Her left arm was free and, though it must have been awkward, she brought it forward and jammed her elbow into his chest. The man roared in anger and lashed out at her, stabbing his knife into her belly. He shoved her away from him and she collapsed backwards to the ground. Her hands went instinctively to her stomach. Blood was pouring from her, and she looked up at him with astonishment as the blood drained from her face.

Oh and as for the different races...
Nekos are bound to fight similarly to cats. Describe their fighting in catlike terms. The rest will have similarly inherent habits. Think about their background, psychology, and physiology, and pick one or two distinctive styles or moves for each.

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okay well tue, where do i go from there?

Yes, if you've played Xenosaga, you would know about Albedo, Rubedo and Nigredo.

Albedo often times hits somebody In the back...and it's disturbing. And it's not Albedo as in intesity, it has to do with Jungian Psychology.

Youtube is not working on my computer, but there's a video of a cutscene from Xenosaga two. The party is in Momo's subconscious (sp?) domain in the winter, and Jr. goes berserk and Albedo picks up his twin (who is a foot and a half shorter than him) and literally drives his arm though jr's back. while choking him.

I will try to get the video later. Youtube hates dialup!